mardi 20 avril 2010

ILLEGAL IMMIGRATION

Immigration means entry into a foreign country of people who come to them to stay and work there. But illegal immigration concerned the inhabitants of poor country seeking a better life in richer countries. Illegal immigration is done so illegally. Like most countries in Africa, Senegal is an underdeveloped country. The rate of unemployment is too high making the lives of many young people very difficult. Faced with this poverty Senegal has experienced a very unfortunate event that is the immigration of young people to Spain. How was it happened and what were the main reasons?

From the years 2004 a good number of young Senegalese one takes the phenomena of illegal immigration to leave Senegal and Join Spain pregnant by the sea canoes for several reasons. These young Senegalese s disbursed a sum equivalent to $ 800 to board a small boat filled with people. They passed through the ocean and made a trip of about 15 days or more.


This phenomenon was due to several reasons. The first reason is the high unemployment rate in our country. Many young graduates unable to find work in the country. This difficulty is due to lack of infrastructure and enterprise can hire these new graduates. Some even go so far as to say that the Senegalese school is training unemployed.

The second reason is the need to try to get his family out of misery. Many young are born in Senegal and we grew up in poverty and misery. These young people are in great difficulty because they have to lighten the task of their parent in the family who has kept up a certain age. So we are in needs to be autonomous and able to take charge. What makes a certain age they want to change their lives and families’ lives.


The third reason is the difficulty of obtaining a visa in the rules of art. As in all countries of Africa, obtaining a visa to leave the country is very difficult. This difficulty is related to the need to have great financial means, to a procedure very lengthy and sometimes you must be very lucky. This difficulty is also related to the reasons listed above which do that there are many applications.


I agree that living conditions in Senegal for some person. But I think it’s not worth risking his life in his canoe. I advise all the young of my country to go through legal way for immigration. I think even that is not a good solution for the country if all young people leave even if I'm in the same case.
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  1. Mikiee20 avril 2010 à 13:57

    1. Is there a clear thesis at the end of the introduction?
    yes
    2. Does the thesis have a topic and controlling ideas?yes

    3. does the thesis address the essay topic well?yes

    4. are there at least two body paragraphs of 5 or more sentences?some yes, some no

    5. Does each body paragraph have a clear topic sentence, and does the topic sentence clearly connect to the controlling ideas of the thesis?yes

    6. Can you easily find at least one major detail in each body paragraph? If not, please let the writer know where you are confused about the major detail.yes

    7. Does the writer EXPLAIN and GIVE EXAMPLES for each major detail, and do they help you understand the major detail better? If not, please let the writer know that he/she needs more detail. Also let the writer know if you think the details are not exactly relevant.yes

    8. Are the details concrete, not too general? let the writer know if s/he needs to give more interesting, concrete details.It is general.

    9. How is the conclusion--does it cover the main ideas and thesis in new words, and does it make a comment that really makes you think about the essay topic some more? Please be specific about your feedback, don't just say Yes or No.yes

    10. What do you like best about this essay? be specific.


    Immigration means entry into a foreign country of people who come to them to stay and work there. : It makes thought deeply, and I agree too.

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  2. Anatolie20 avril 2010 à 23:26

    1. Is there a clear thesis at the end of the introduction? yes

    2. Does the thesis have a topic and controlling ideas? yes

    3. does the thesis address the essay topic well? yes

    4. are there at least two body paragraphs of 5 or more sentences? no

    5. Does each body paragraph have a clear topic sentence, and does the topic sentence clearly connect to the controlling ideas of the thesis? yes

    6. Can you easily find at least one major detail in each body paragraph? If not, please let the writer know where you are confused about the major detail. yes

    7. Does the writer EXPLAIN and GIVE EXAMPLES for each major detail, and do they help you understand the major detail better? If not, please let the writer know that he/she needs more detail. Also let the writer know if you think the details are not exactly relevant. yes

    8. Are the details concrete, not too general? let the writer know if s/he needs to give more interesting, concrete details. yes.

    9. How is the conclusion--does it cover the main ideas and thesis in new words, and does it make a comment that really makes you think about the essay topic some more? Please be specific about your feedback, don't just say Yes or No.yes

    10. What do you like best about this essay? be specific. is a sad story.

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